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Unread 12-11-2010, 01:37 AM
Philip Quinlan Philip Quinlan is offline
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I think the poem actually happens here:

Mozart does it so neatly,
answering every question posed.
I swear his concerto billowing out the porch
attracts bird song.
Their song
is not so neatly balanced as the master’s,
their melodies can end in queries
or falter in mid-arc without resolution
while no matter how far Mozart’s questing strays
it always folds back to its origin
not just by counterpoint but re-affirmation
as if the world made sense.


and nothing new happens after that. The switch to foxgloves doesn't give me any new insight, it just restates the point.

The best line here is:

their melodies can end in queries

and I would have liked to see that idea developed.

But yes, hopefully FV will make a good showing in DTH 2010. A few foxgloves among the clipped hedges!

Philip
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