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Unread 07-06-2017, 12:29 PM
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Aaron, I'm afraid that Mr Ivanov is over-optimistic in believing that even a few things actually exist:

...nothing's real, except the stars
in icy skies, the yellow gleam
of dawn ...

The truth is:

The yellow gleam of dawn? Surprise, surprise!
It’s simply caused by jaundice-riddled eyes.
Those twinkling lights? I’m sorry, they’re not stars,
Just pinpricks in our damaged retinas.

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Unread 07-06-2017, 01:07 PM
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You get no lunch. You didn't pay the cover.
Forget about it. Your free ride is over.
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Unread 07-06-2017, 03:13 PM
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A thought at breakfast, still and sad,
makes you pause the butter knife:
the chances are you've already had
the happiest moment of your life.
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Mark,

Compared to mine, your life was better;
you had a knife and even butter.
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Well, it's usually margarine, but that wouldn't scan.
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Well, it's usually margarine, but that wouldn't scan.
I tried to write a poem today
Which would have brought a big payday,
But language foiled my brilliant plan:
The f@#king truth wouldn't scan.

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Mark, I reckon "the chances are" is too optimistic. Don't give us any hope!
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A Troika

Vladimir Putin’s losing cred.
Some hope he’ll soon be stone-cold dead.

They’re saying Vlad’s a Kleptocrat
Who steals their food so they eat rat.

Once a Soviet, always Russian,
Vlad attacks with Trump’s permission.
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These are all wonderful.
Here's my 2 cents' worth, from my last book:

LIMITS OF MY KNOWLEDGE

Along the beach the footsteps wend.
I do not know where things will end.

You found yourself another friend.
I do not know why things must end.

Researchers tell us time can bend.
I do not know when things will end.

The plots of all the movies blend.
I do not know how things will end.

I've seen the way my white cells trend.
I only know that things will end.
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