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During the power blackout in LA, I finicked with the response to Jayne and Jane:

A Queen of Darts

Desire exists to be denied.
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This lonely Queen of Darts
juggles darts for hearts
that puncture hers, cause pain,
her monologue makes plain.

Perhaps Jacks are not civil
because voiced by the devil
back below god’s image,
pain blowing from his visage?

No wonder she’s a wreck.
No heart Jack’s in her deck!



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Afterr Jayne and Jane

The Lonely Queen of Darts
Juggles darts for hearts,
Each punctured and in pain
Unmated may remain—
Perhaps males aren’t civil
Because voiced by the devil
Back beneath god’s image
Pain blowing from his visage?
So one sees she’s a wreck:
No love card in her deck.

PS the devil cracked me up!
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Last edited by RCL; 01-20-2021 at 12:18 PM. Reason: lightly revised; more drivel
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