[Simon Hunt]

Hi Ralph--

Are these a sequence or two individual poems? The first one doesn't do much for me. Yep, those seasons repeat, all right. In the second, the interplay between shortening days and increasing light due to leaves falling is interesting. However, "take flight" seems like rhyme-driven cliche to me and not strictly accurate, either. What does "time's out" mean?

[Julie Steiner]

This was a different poem a few days ago, when I was traveling. That version was several stanzas long and all about time's being a wheel, and the Rota Fortunae. There were some interesting images, but on the whole I didn't feel that it was traveling far enough to come back around. It just sat and spinned.

Ralph, I think you workshopped something very similar to "A Plant's Seasons" here before. The slant rhymes are playful and childlike (those are intended as compliments).

Not sure about the last one. I like the concept, but something about it just doesn't grab me yet. Maybe changing the rhyme scheme from abba to abab would make it more satisfying for me.