Hi David,
I also enjoyed this. I would also lose either "and" before "into" or the "to" of "into". I think like the idea of it being "done up into a class of its own", and you already have an "and" before gloriously, so I guess I'm for losing the "and" before "into".
My other nit is the semicolon. What is it's function? I don't understand it. It's not separating two independent clauses, since the phrase that follows it isn't an independent clause, and it's not serving as a listing comma in a complicated list. An en-dash would work, I think. Or a colon and swap the existing colon for an en-dash. Actually comma would work, too, I think.
Best,
Matt
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