[Julie Steiner]

Lovely, Nemo.

I initially read Speaker 2 as being a somewhat accusatory daughter. If you would like to clarify the nature and tone of the relationship between the two speakers — and you might not, although it would have helped those who, like me, were struggling to suss out the context — you could easily turn the initial "But" of Speaker 2 into "Friend,".

You might (or might not) also consider changing this somewhat stilted bit:
     “It’s the heart of me you know.
into something like this:
     "The heart of me, how well you know!


Editors of a certain age will probably wince at the capitalized preposition "of" in the title.

[W T Clark]

Nemo:
It may be impossible to use "queer" without those of a younger strata not thinking of gayness. I do not think this is a strong problem here.

The flurry of rhymes has a both a kind of slow wisdom and hurtling flight. Placed in juxtaposition with the more bulky first speaker, they have an urgency of reassurance.
I sometimes script it as if it were a King Lear of a less apocalyptic time-line consoling and being consoled by a daughter. It is strange; most young men are not Hamlet: but almost all old men are Lear.
It is an exquisite performance.

Hope this helps.