[Mark McDonnell]

Mark and Julie thank you both. A revision posted with a changed ending.

For me, it's a definite Yes, Jan. Beautiful.

[Jim Moonan]

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Hi Jan, I regret not having commented on this before now, and am grateful it has popped up again, having read it earlier and being taken by its sensory-laden/sensual feel and vividness of imagery. (I've also not found the time to comment on a few other poems you've posted recently that I was similarly impressed by. My apologies.)

This is not a poem that would benefit from my nitpicking, as I sometimes feel obligated to do given the workshop platform.
I would be happy to have a book of your poems on my bookshelf. Right alongside a book of poems by Cally Conan-Davies (if I could find one : )) .

Beautifully rendered.

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[Jan Iwaszkiewicz]

Thanks Mark I am glad you pushed me.

Hi Jim it’s been a while. Thank you so much for your kind words they are greatly appreciated. I.am glad you like us Aussies!

Regards,

Jan