Hi, N!
Not every poem turns out as we'd like, but the effort's not wasted if we learn something that we can apply to future poems.
I shared Matt's confusion about the logistical details of spark vs. ember vs. dust and soot, and also the more serious problem that this reader's personal experience does not endorse the universal truth being proposed by this general statement. (Surely some of that revival/rapprochement must have already taken place by both sides before the kiss, if the exes have gotten close enough for a consensual kiss to occur. Otherwise, it's restraining order time.) And I agree with Matt that making this a more personal statement, or perhaps just a statement of hope, could make the poem more effective.
Minor nit: "lover's hearts" >>> "lovers' hearts."
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