[Ashley Bowen]

Hi, N.,

I won't make repeat what's been said. It does seems overwrought and unwieldy, BUT, the first line, IMO, is a great title for a poem, especially if the poem can find a way to take itself less seriously than this one does.

Stokesbury's poem comes to mind as something I'm talking about:

https://lastyearsalmanac.wordpress.c...on-stokesbury/