[Jim Ramsey]

Hi Susan,

I still think there's more work to do in showing the change of speaker. It is such a key component that it should not be puzzling in any way. I wonder whether the dashes to introduce dialogue as used by James Joyce and Cormac McCarthy would work.

All the best,
Jim

*coming back to clarify that I mean a more extensive use than already suggested by Julie and seconded by Hilary. maybe something like this and maybe even getting the implied "U" actually in use by the second speaker in some way:

IOU

——There is no I or U in love;
however, there's an O...
O Love, what do I owe?

——Yo(u) know—or do not
choose to know.

[Susan McLean]

Jim, I have tried adding a stanza break between the two speakers.

Susan