[Trevor Conway]

Hi Harry,

I agree with Yves's suggestion regarding the title, or at least some indication of neurodivergence from the get-go. Otherwise, it might just come across as eccentricity or experimentalism for no good reason, which was my first impression until reading your explanation.

The content of the poem is generally pretty interesting, I think, though I think you need a break/change in the tone/pace somewhere around the middle, at least briefly, in order to sustain the poem as a whole. I know you want to reflect the structure of a neurodivergent mind, but as a poem, I think it needs that.

Thanks for sharing.

Trev