[Harry Nicolas]

Hey Jim, Thanks for the reply.Honestly, don't knock the TBQ till you try it haha. I am still trying to figure out how to write a narrative style while still keeping it poetic and not prosaic.

that's a funny memory you brought up, but yeah, thinking back to some of the things we did as kids makes you appreciate your health now haha.

Thank you for the feedback.

[David Callin]

Hi Harry. You lost me at the end, but it was a hell of a ride, with some terrific lines. There's nothing boringly conventional about your poems, I'm finding.

Cheers

David

[Harry Nicolas]

Hey David, glad you were able to get something out of it. Honestly somehow everything I write comes out slightly bizarre.

I made some changes mostly with the second half of the poem based on everyone's comments.