My experience with haiku/tanka/senryu is very limited indeed, having only tried my hand at one or two. From my experience at other boards, the haiku seems to be one of those forms that people either love or hate - doesn't seem to be any middle ground.
Anyway, I'll throw my only two attempts into the pot - I really have no idea if these work or not since any previous comments have been somewhat ambiguous - I suspect though, that with the human element in them, they tend more to senryu rather than haiku? Dunno.
Cricket chirps echo
in green fields of memory;
childhood starts anew.
Peaks, valleys, a bed
of opened flower petals;
I leave the lights on.
Many thanks to Lee for his time and thanks also for this great thread - I too, have learned much from it.
Regards,
HB
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