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Originally posted by Duncan Gillies MacLaurin:
Lee I know Stephen said you prefered a group of haiku, but until this morning I hadn't written any haiku for about five years. Now I've got three, so I can present them as a group. Any comments you may have would be appreciated.
Duncan
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Thanks for sharing your poems, Duncan. I have already commented on the second one. I am afraid I don't have a lot to say about the other two except this: the bedst haiku usually present a particular experience or scene, whereas these two are more generalized than particular. You might try to write about particular experiences you have had and then paint the picture so it puts the reader there with you to share the experience. Hope this helps! Lee
how to get through the day?
elementary, my dear Watson!
a six-pipe problem
the ball I lost
from the tee turns up
in the hole
wretched I
cross the
line at
last
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