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Unread 09-11-2009, 09:04 PM
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I'd love to see it, and please send a copy to Rose and/or Roger.

Thanks!

Martin

p.s. my email is martin.rocek@gmail.com
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A version of 'Constaza Carved' exists on Sonnet Central. I take the point about not compromising any forthcoming publication, but since this is sitting there in a public domain - I can't really see the harm in posting a link to it.

http://thesonnetboard.yuku.com/topic/494

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More Religious Twaddle for You, Maz Dear

This sonnet would annoy you, I suppose.
(“I suppose is filler... this is maud-
lin sentiment...”) You’d never spare the rod
from this one, since you never did with those
I workshopped. How you must have held your nose,
critiquing my religious stuff! “Oh, God,”
you’d type, then tell me where my meter was flawed
(“Like there?”) and skewer my unconvincing close.

Yet you were kind...suspending disbelief
to teach your Christian neighbor to pursue
the Powerful, the Perfect, and the True.
Remembering that kindness makes my grief
much less, you so-called atheist, for how
could what you loved so long deny you now?

--Julie Stoner

Last edited by Julie Steiner; 09-12-2009 at 10:37 PM. Reason: "god" to "God"--Maz did always capitalize it.
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Julie, that poem made me cry.

Susan
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Me too, Julie.
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Lovely, Julie, and an entirely convincing close.
Reminds me of Abou Ben Adhem:

http://www.cs.rice.edu/~ssiyer/minstrels/poems/153.html

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Lovely sonnet, Julie. What better way to remember her than with a poem?
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She was the real thing, a born poet, even if she came to it late. Thanks to those who have taken steps toward putting her work in print, and to those who've posted tributes and links to her poems. I'm glad her work is in good hands.
Still, because she was so intensely private, I keep thinking of Oscar Wilde's, 'biography lends to death a new terror...'

Rest in peace, Maz.

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Dissection

In the end we find
we can’t divorce
the voice
from choice
or style. The heart
from mind, or guile.
Faced with those
we hope to know,
the disassembled
parts create
a hole.
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Good poem, wendy. I first misread "disassembled" as "dissembled," and that made sense, too.

Susan
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"the disassembled/ parts create/ a hole."

Indeed. Thanks for this, wendy.
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