[Len Krisak]

Steve: a considered--and considerate--reply. Fair enough.

Now, how about some of the others of you out there weighing
in on what you see as the technical (or other) failings
or successes in this sonnet Tim Murphy has offered us?????

[Clive Watkins]

"Two things do bother me about the poem, though: the repetition of "settles" in the first two lines (I would be inclined to substitute "hovers" in the first line...."

AE's instinct is surely correct. In fact, I think there may be a typo in the poem as posted, the opening lines running as follows:

The worker hovers where the jade plant blooms,
Then settles on a blossom to her taste....

Clive Watkins

[Tim Murphy]

Dear Clive, Ouch. You are absolutely right.