[Jim Ramsey]

Hi Sam,

Thanks for the feedback. I've rewritten the last couple lines as a result. Overall, the poem seems to be getting less cutesy and mocking and more grown-up in tone. Sometimes I like word play at the expense of message and maybe it's time to self-assess.

Jim

[R. S. Gwynn]

Maybe "This tribute from the morning's bucket list"?

[Jim Ramsey]

Hi Sam,

Yes, thanks. I like your suggested line better.

Jim