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Unread 11-20-2009, 11:32 AM
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My untaught ad-
dlebrained old Dad-
dy played so bad-
ly that it sad-
denned sir and mad-
am and the lad-
dies in the mad-
ding crowd. He'd glad-
den none with cad-
enzas sporad-
ically add-
ed by his pad-
dling bow. The cad-
re paid no ad-
mission, skeedad-
dling from Dad's Strad.
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Unread 11-20-2009, 09:07 PM
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Yes, Julie! I especially like 'I've crad' 'you've trad' - using a twang really makes it sound like the real thing.)

Thank you Marion and Maryann!

The definition of nad that I came upon was:

noun: a coenzyme present in most living cells and derived from the B vitamin nicotinic acid; serves as a reductant in various metabolic processes

Not quite a haystack, but that's perspective for you - looking for something within vs without.

Fantastic R. S.! (I don't think that's how you're addressed...?)

One comment if I may, 'gladden' 'gladfully', if you're okay with it, then ok.
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Unread 11-20-2009, 09:18 PM
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Is there a word for Sam's kind of rhyme? There surely must be. I have used it myself but only sporadically. Come on Sphereans, this is the kind of thing that you collectively know.

Here's something by Harry Graham which might be thought a related thing. It's long but so ingenious I'm sure you'll overlook that.

Poetical economy

What hours I spent of precious time,
What pints of ink I used to waste,
Attempting to secure a rhyme
To suit the public taste,
Until I found a simple plan
Which makes the lamest lyric scan!

When I've a syllable de trop,
I cut it off, without apol.:
This verbal sacrifice, I know,
May irritate the schol.;
But all must praise my dev'lish cunn.
Who realise that Time is Mon.

My sense remains as clear as cryst.,
My style as pure as any Duch.
Who does not boast a bar sinist.
Upon her fam. escutch.;
And I can treat with scornful pit.
The sneers of ev'ry captious crit.

I gladly publish to the pop.
A scheme of which I make no myst.,
And beg my fellow scribes to cop.
This labour-saving syst.
I offer it to the consid.
Of ev'ry thoughtful individ.

The author, working like a beav.,
His readers' pleasure could redoub.
Did he but now and then abbrev.
The work he gives his pub.
(This view I most partic. suggest
To A.C. Bens. and G.K. Chest.)

If Mr. Caine rewrote the Scape.
And Miss Corell. condensed Barabb.,
What could they save in foolscap pape.
Did they but cult. the hab.
Which teaches people to suppress
All syllables that are unnec.!

If playwrights would but thus dimin.
The length of time each drama takes,
(The Second Mrs. Tanq. by Pin.
Or even Ham., by Shakes.)
We could maintain a watchful att.
When at a Mat. on Wed. or Sat.

Have done, ye bards, with dull monot.!
Foll. my examp., O Stephen Phill.,
O Owen Seam., O William Wat.,
O Ella Wheeler Wil.,
And share with me the grave respons.
Of writing this amazing nons.!
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Unread 11-20-2009, 09:51 PM
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Zita,
NAD I am afraid is pronounced N.A.D. (en ey dee) so that won't work.

Everyone,
great fun reading them all--I am too tired to come up with anything, but
I offer "hanging chad" as a promising rhyme that no one seems to have used.

Martin
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Darn! Isn't this where some special license comes in?!

Sam! That's it.

Last edited by Zita Zenda; 11-20-2009 at 09:53 PM. Reason: R. S. = Sam realization
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Unread 11-21-2009, 02:16 AM
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Yes, Julie! I especially like 'I've crad' 'you've trad' - using a twang really makes it sound like the real thing.)

Thank you Marion and Maryann!

The definition of nad that I came upon was:

noun: a coenzyme present in most living cells and derived from the B vitamin nicotinic acid; serves as a reductant in various metabolic processes

Not quite a haystack, but that's perspective for you - looking for something within vs without.

Fantastic R. S.! (I don't think that's how you're addressed...?)

One comment if I may, 'gladden' 'gladfully', if you're okay with it, then ok.
If it is all helpful "nad" is an often used contraction for "gonad". To say something is "the dog's nads" means (figuratively) "excellent".
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Unread 11-21-2009, 09:03 PM
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Is there a word for Sam's kind of rhyme?
How about hy- rhy- ?
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Unread 11-22-2009, 08:17 AM
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The only nad I know is the acronym formed from the N A D that everyone wants to see on their medical results. It's shorthand for "nothing abnormal discovered" or "no abnormality detected". Any which way, it's good news.
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Unread 11-22-2009, 02:42 PM
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Okay, Julie - we're even in the inspiration department.

Can't figure out if this is Hank Williams or George Jones . . . .

Yew wore ma brad,
My shahning prad,
Rat ba ma sad,
Until yew lad.

That nat ah crad,
All weepy ad,
Over our divad
When we came untad.

Ah took a slad
And nearly dad,
But tears have drad,
And ah won’t had.

So when yew trad
T'offer me a rad
In your Power Glad—
Ah din’t break mah strad.

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Unread 11-22-2009, 04:38 PM
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Frank, that's rad purty.
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