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Unread 08-21-2005, 06:00 PM
Janet Kenny Janet Kenny is offline
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The Bean Counters
By Agony Cramp


“Has anybody acted?” said the poet
Beating out a plot in verse;
But the academics chewed upon their nosebags
and some let fall a curse.
And a novelist ran out of the cloister,
behind the poet’s back.
And he beat upon the door again a second time;
Is anybody in this shack?
But none condescended to the poet,
no eye to the lock was pressed
to peer through the chink at his red nose
nor offer a rag to blow it.
But only the metronomes answered
from deep in the catacombs
from out of their wood and metal boxes
in voices grey and rancid;
cloned rhythms in syllabics without meaning
were heard in the theatre’s boom,
echoing like a vast cathedral
to the poet's sense of doom.
And his feet were worn out with thumping,
his bunions torturing his soul.
While his play, failed, plotless and unending,
fell down a deep black hole;
So he bitterly beat on the door, shouting
“Bastards” and lifted his fists:--
“Tell them I know, where their books are
and I know how this plot twists.”
Never an acknowledgement they gave him.
Though they heard every word.
Their ivory towers impregnable and inward
held tenure long preferred.
Ay, they heard his feet upon the meter
and the beat of crutches on stone,
And how the pages fell upon the pavement
when the poet left, alone.



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Unread 08-21-2005, 06:14 PM
Mark Allinson Mark Allinson is offline
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Scott, thank you for your contribution. I like your idea of the peak within a phrase. There is a difficulty with the descriptive language we use to describe these things, and I am searching for new tools like this to help understand how it works.

But perhaps I will never understand it.

I do agree that "The Listeners" is rather messy in places, giving too much scope for ambiguity in meter.

Janet!

I just saw your poem. It is very good!

Now, tell us - from the horse's mouth - what is your scansion?

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Mark Allinson

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Unread 08-21-2005, 06:16 PM
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Quote:
Originally posted by Mark Allinson:

Janet!

I just saw your poem. It is very good!

Now, tell us - from the horses mouth - what is your scansion?
34--23--34

Not bad eh?

Janet
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Unread 08-21-2005, 06:18 PM
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Excellent figures!

A sexy poem!

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Unread 08-24-2005, 03:13 PM
Jerry Glenn Hartwig Jerry Glenn Hartwig is offline
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Mark and Henry!!!!!

I have Carol's sound file for The Listeners. I don't want to post it until I have yours also.

Where are they?!
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Unread 08-24-2005, 04:19 PM
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Sound file? What sound file?
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Unread 08-24-2005, 04:45 PM
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I'm disappointed that Hope's vast hieratic utterance has been so slighted here-- and that no one has visited the Beowulf in a discussion of accentual verse.

'The Listeners' is tricky business, but it's ballad stanza as far as I'm concerned. That or chaos, and I don't buy chaos for this poem.

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Unread 08-25-2005, 07:23 AM
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The Listeners' is tricky business, but it's ballad stanza as far as I'm concerned. That or chaos, and I don't buy chaos for this poem.
The ballad stanza, to my knowledge, is A4 B3 C4 B3, which would disqualify The Listeners, both in terms of rhyme and meter, though its meter certainly has echoes of the 3/4 contrast. But the first lines, to my ear, read A3 B3 C4 B3.

The subject matter, on the other hand, is perfectly suitable, though the atmosphere is more Gothic than a traditional ballad (in my experience anyway).

But I fail to see why metrical irregularities in The Listeners should mean it is in any way chaotic. On the contrary, I would suggest such unevenness is deliberate, part of the mysterious texture of the poem, part of the spell of its unique, dreamy atmosphere. The strangely archaic or odd words (champed, smote, 'neath etc.) also contribute to this.

Incidentally, there's a lovely bit of rhyming magic/mimesis in the final word, where the vowel-sound shifts/gallops from long (stone) to short (gone).


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Unread 08-25-2005, 01:03 PM
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I mis-spoke. Ballad measure. 4-3 alternation. Many readers here seem to have difficulty discerning between secondary and primary stress. That poem is maddeningly ambiguous in some of its 4 stress lines, but the overall pattern is unmistakable.
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Unread 08-25-2005, 01:05 PM
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Sound file? What sound file?
I challenged people, specificly Mark Allison, Carol and Henry to send me sound files of them reciting The Listeners, to hear the differences. I wondered if their labels affected the way they read the poem.

I'll post the files online.

Anyone can send a file, if they wish.

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