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Originally Posted by Spindleshanks
Martin, that's the wrong "past." You want the verb "passed," which might pass if hononyms are acceptable. I wouldn't count on it.
Peter
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Oops! You're right, Peter. Thanks! My mind is getting muddled by all this thinking. I might keep the hononym and see if they accept it. I've got enough poems now to take that chance. Here is another I just came up with. (I'm not sure about the title yet. Maybe there's something better.)
That’s Life
The giant star was feeling undepressed
by gravity, until a violent rain
of matter started falling. Trying to strain
against the pressure squeezing on her nest,
she quickly lost, imploding. We are blest
to have such catastrophic blasts, whose chain
of elements makes life, a complex brain,
the sea, the atmosphere, and all the rest
of the miracles on Earth. A violent blast
like that would make this fragile planet wilt
were such a sun too close. But thank the day
when the ashes from a beast like that had built
this world, whose star will soon enough be past
her mid-life — something no one can delay.
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lines 11-12 were
were such a sun too close. But every day
say thanks to that time bomb for what it’s built: