Hi Roger, et al.,
Yes, that usage of ďlickĒ is a bit obscure. I had to check a dictionary to be sure I wasnít imagining things. But it was indeed there, and thatís good enough for me.
As you can see, there are a couple new drafts now, both considerably more regular than the first one. I think Iíve found my way to some happier lines, but on the whole, I donít feel like either one is as satisfying rhythmically. It was an interesting experiment, but they just donít sound like Rimbaud to me Ė particularly the pentameter one. It feels like itís in too much of a hurry to reach its destination.