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Unread 11-11-2020, 02:06 PM
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Ah, so you didn't mean "Covid-slow" in quite the way I saw it... but I think it's a good phrase nonetheless for also describing a place (or a person) not observing the rules.

Yes... I get ''warp'' now. Thanks Aaron.

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"Covid-slow" is an idiom I have heard around town--business can be "slow" or it can be "Covid-slow."
Copy that.

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The travel to the past starts out as musical nostalgia, but from the second stanza on, there is no music or experienced past, but the just historical past. Also, I wasn't clear where Eldorado comes in or why the poet gets near it. The sonnet is a compressed form and so jumps are OK as is asking the reader to make connections, so don't know what to make of it, but after three readings I am concerned the piece is too loose.
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Bill and Aaron, in this case I can relate somehow to many of his references and am not troubled much by those that slide by. Iíve read it a vague number of times and might read it more. This is in one of Aaron Poochigianís signature styles. Are there particular historical areas that trouble you? Why not ask him. He will speak for himself.
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Hello, Bill and Allen,

yes, I regard the "leap" as a hallmark of exciting rather than predictable poetry.

It was Cortez who was looking for El Dorado (he didn't find it).

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Great beginning. I don't find the race through highlights of American history persuasive.

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That's ok, Bill. Thanks.
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