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Unread 09-28-2017, 09:00 PM
Michael Cantor Michael Cantor is offline
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Still another from my endless supply of youthful excesses.

From the Tomb of the Unknown Executive

When I set forth in industry each day
my thoughts were parsed in sharp execu-tese:
nouns turned to verbs the proper corporate way
by bulleting on focused strategies.
I dreamed in PowerPointed pros and cons:
strengths, weaknesses, advantages and threats -
replaced emotions with comparisons -
this gain, that loss, those assets and these debts.

But now I scribble lines bemusedly
as sonnets with a touch of dithyramb;
select with pentametric pedantís glee
each shadowed word; and carefully enjamb
the diverse turns of life and poetry
in one last twist: I think, therefore, iamb!
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Unread 09-29-2017, 07:50 PM
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Gail White Gail White is offline
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Here's one by Lord Alfred Douglas, worth it for the last 3 lines:


To see the moment hold a madrigal,
To find some cloistered place, some hermitage
For free devices, some deliberate cage
Wherein to keep wild thoughts like birds in thrall,
To eat sweet honey and to taste black gall,
To fight with form, to wrestle and to rage,
Till at the last upon the conquered page
The shadows of created Beauty fall--

This is the sonnet, this is all delight
Of every flower that blows in every Spring,
And all desire of every desert place,
This is the joy that fills a cloudy night
When, bursting from her misty following,
A perfect moon wins to an empty space.
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RCL RCL is offline
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Location: Los Angeles, CA
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Default nonce or broken?

The Donaldís Love Sonnet

I want it
I see it
I grope it
I grab it

I pet it
I lay it
I cheat it
I buy it

I charm it
I rape it
I fear it
I wed it

I have it
I hate it
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Unread 07-01-2020, 07:30 PM
Roger Slater Roger Slater is online now
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Thanks for kicking this old thread back up. I didn't even remember writing "The Sung," so it's nice to discover a poem of my own (not that it's all that good).
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Unread 07-01-2020, 11:31 PM
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Jayne Osborn Jayne Osborn is offline
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Bumping it up... or stirring it up... with another "broken sonnet" that isn't a sonnet?
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Unread 07-02-2020, 02:06 AM
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Ann Drysdale Ann Drysdale is offline
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Location: Old South Wales (UK)
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Rhyme gets you noticed, but itís just a flier
To pull the punters to the proper stuff.
Itís to free verse a poet should aspire;
Rhyming and chiming isnít strong enough
To carry messages of any weight
And real involvement in the here and now
Demands the rawness of the naked state
Of language. One can just imagine how
Imaginative thought would feel the pinch
Of being squeezed into a villanelle
Whose rigid metre wouldnít give an inch
When freedomís feet demanded space to swell.
Who in their right mind would contrive a sonnet
If anything worthwhile depended on it?
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Unread 07-05-2020, 12:51 PM
Allen Tice Allen Tice is offline
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Ann, I like it a lot. The volta is so smooth there's no swivel. It's like driving a curve for 160 on the Autostrada. Curve? What curve?
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