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Unread 12-10-2011, 02:29 PM
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Preacher’s Grove
for John Stern

I carried an axe, a whetstone and two files,
not sheaves of poetry but drop-forged steels.
Sixteen, I could have tramped for fifty miles
if not for the blood pooling at my heels.
Mole foam was uninvented, and my boots
were brutal.All my scouts were little brutes,
scraping their knees while tripping over roots.

Recall an earlier day: at age eleven
I shouldered my enormous haversack,
some twenty pounds (the sleeping bag weighed seven.)
The bigger boys carried the heavier loads,
far more than any Tenderfoot could pack.
All of the paths we hiked were logging roads
to reach a campsite I recall as heaven.

It was a grove of virgin Norway pine.
Older, I’d hike alone there, afternoons
when I’d no map and compass course to line,
no Pioneering Merit Badge to teach,
only a switchback trail, a steep incline,
only the chorus of the distant loons—
and all the listeners I longed to reach.
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Unread 12-10-2011, 02:48 PM
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I know this poem very well and love it - another heartbreaker. "All my scouts were little brutes" - just delicious.
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Unread 12-10-2011, 03:40 PM
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I have a qualified guess. Good work as per ususal.
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Not many spherians are able to use the word "haversack." A fine piece.
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Unread 12-11-2011, 04:48 AM
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I don't remember seeing this one. I love the content, but can't help wondering why the rhyme scheme is different for each stanza. (Or is it a form I don't recognise?)
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You have seen it, Jayne because you made that same remark. I don't know why the rhyme scheme is different.
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No mystery about the writer here. A fine poem with a killer ending that, as Michael suggests, has a few areas that could have been notched up, e.g. the inaccessible dedication, the now/past/future sequencing, and the lack of a set-up for "listeners".

John

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