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Old 03-19-2014, 07:53 PM
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Default Being an extract from the autobiography of Susan Boyle ghostwritten by McGonagall

I wrote this as straight biography, not ghostwritten autobiography, before realizing that wouldn't do - which shows it pays to properly read the question before attempting an answer!
I was also 15 words over limit. I rephrased it as prose to address these problems. Here are both versions.


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‘Twas on the First of April in Nineteen and Sixty-One
That Susan Magdalane, named Boyle, issued to see the sun
But rocketed to stardom ten days and forty-eight years later
On the stage - “Britain’s Got Talent” - all would rise to celebrate her.

At Edinburgh Acting School and Fringe she’d trod the boards
Until angelic-voiced she’d power to pacify the hordes.
To glower in that hour Simon Cowell ceased, repenting;
That she had Great British Talent, judges, viewers, all, assenting.

Though homely in appearance and not visibly a star
It is the heart, not surface only, makes us what we are;
A prominence now rising from domesticity silent
Susan gleaned respect of hearers and won applause violent.

Her song “I Dreamed a Dream” was from Les Misérables oddly
For that it did increase the cheer of everyone there bodily.
Born in Blackburn (Lothian West - not Lancashire) she’d grown
In age and stature and her skill till audibly she shone!

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On April First, Nineteen-Sixty-One, I Susan Magdalane Boyle issued to see the sun
but rocketed to stardom ten days forty-eight years later on the stage - “Britain’s Got Talent”. All would rise to celebrate!
Though homely in appearance, not visibly a star, it is the heart, not surface only, makes us what we are. A prominence arising from domesticity silent I gleaned respect of hearers and their applause violent.
At Edinburgh Acting School and Fringe I’d trod the boards until angelic-voiced I’d power to pacify the hordes. To glower in that hour Simon Cowell ceased, repenting; that I had Great British Talent, judges, viewers, all assenting.
My song “I Dreamed a Dream” was from Les Misérables oddly for it did increase the cheer of everyone there bodily. Born in Blackburn (Lothian West - not Lancs) Miss Boyle had grown in age, stature and skill till audibly she shone!
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Old 03-20-2014, 03:14 AM
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Default Extract from autobiography of Susan Boyle ghostwritten by J.R.R.Tolkien

In a home in the town of Blackburn there lived a hobbyist named SuBo, who loved to sing. Not Blackburn, Lancashire but Blackburn, West Lothian (which is equally wet and oozy). However, the home was dry.
I am SuBo! Although it took years before that name came to be heard in the counsels of the Great and Wise, from this homely beginning I set out on my Great Adventure.
The Green Room had a door, with a big brass knob, leading to a tunnel, tiled and carpeted, with many doors off it, winding into the theatre towards The Stage (as people for miles around called it).
This is the story of how I had an Adventure and found myself doing things altogether unexpected. I would face perils - the wizard Simon of the Dark Glower; the ranked hordes of Murmur - hostile forces, inclined however to underestimate the humble…
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