Hi Glenn,
I know I have been a long time getting back to you but I've been waiting for inspiration (and am still waiting). Some of your suggested fixes were obvious needs, such as my mangling of the spelling of schmooze. I've eliminated that word altogether at this point. I've adopted several of your suggestions and used others as jumping off points. I'm still not sure of my product to date and will probably give this a major overall in the future. I started out wanting to say one thing and have turned the poem in another direction that I'm not sure of. I've kept wolf in the title for now, but as you imply it seems I'm alluding to the movie, "The Wolf of Wall Street." which I do not want to do. Thanks for all your crits. They were all good fixes for the poem as it is now, but I'm not sure that the poem will stay as it is.
Jim
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