Mary: thanks so much for your kind comments. I was a bit nervous posting here among all you masters of the form! I very, very rarely rhyme in my poetry. It was actually rather helpful to have the rhymes given to me on plate--for some reason! At the same time, one has to juggle too...
I agree L.9 is a little problematic--and yes, I intended an anapaest, but it does feel forced, and I will look at it later.
Also, does anyone find my last line awkward, with the extra syllable? I was trying to pack so much in, including the idea that the Fool might have killed off the King.
And yes, "sheaves" was the worst!
The title was just for fun--and in case anyone didn't know King Lear (very unlikely here, I know!).
Brian: Yes, I know, Martin has really put us to work, hasn't he?
Martin: they are SO good! Quality as well as quantity. How do you do it?!
Charlotte
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