[Jayne Osborn]

One nit. S2 L5
“But every time he really makes me laugh;”
I’m not sure whether to read that as meaning “On those occasions that he makes me laugh” or “he really makes me laugh every time”. I’m thinking first version is closer to what you mean, so maybe rephrase it as “But when he makes me laugh, we really laugh”. Just a thought.

Cheers
Joe

I've changed that line, Joe, which I wasn't happy with, so thank you for making me think about it some more. I hope the meaning is more clear now.

Jayne