[David Anthony]

Many thanks to all for their interesting comments and suggestions.

A couple of people suggested this is a mixed metaphor:

"a sharp deflating insight has unfurled/ its wings"

With respect, it is not. It's the robin, metaphorically speaking, heading off to burst N's bubble with its sharp beak.

I wouldn't mention it except I'm quite proud of it.

Best regards,

David

[Adam Elgar]

A piece of work which makes nonsense of the distinction between art and craft. The craftsmanship is exquisite. Maybe, as I think others are saying, it's a bit too everything-in-place, a bit too cool and knowing, but what the hell! - it's a delight, and I'd be happy to write like this any time.